This post was written in response to Linda Hill’s weekly Stream of Consciousness Saturday prompt. Follow the link on the banner for more information
This weeks prompt is“lip” I’m going to write a 100 word flash fiction story, because as soon as I saw the word, an idea flashed into my mind. I’ve been thinking about it and now I’m going to write it. I won’t edit, but I will weed out words to reduce it to 100 max. Sounds like fun, but let’s see how it works out!
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Her Lips
She pursed her lips. Those soft, luscious lips that had caressed every inch of my skin. Only mine.
They sank into a hard, angry line. Lips that had told me they loved only me.
I willed her lips to move, to show me there was still hope, but they remained rigid, while blood, as red as her lips dripped onto the floor.
I love you, I told her, and at last, those lips that made me lose my mind, twitched slightly, one last time.
She pressed her lips to mine and dug the knife further into the wound. It’s over, she whispered.
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Sorry it was a bit dark, but that’s where her lips took me!
A psychological, tense thriller in 100 words. Does it work?
Rereading Jane Eyre 
It does work, indeed!
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Thanks, Olga. Isn’t it great when an idea hits you and you get it on paper straight away and say to yourself, wow, I can do this! 😉Other times, when it doesn’t happen it’s frustrating…🤔
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It’s dark but it works for me! I love the ambiguity – I’m still trying to figure out what got them to that scene!
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I have my opinion, but even though I’m the writer, it’s the reader who has the last word.
A painter, who is a dear friend, taught me that once you paint a picture, it belongs to those who view it. Your motive/ intention is no longer more relevant than theirs. It shocked me at first, but I think he has a point. So, it’s up to you;)
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