#FridayFictioneers #FlashFiction ‘The Deserted Path’ #100words

I’m thrilled to be with you yet again with my Friday Fictioneers story of Alice Pendragon and her adventures, thanks to the photo prompts and inspiration provided by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields at Friday Fictioneers. Check out this weekly challenge here.

PHOTO PROMPT © Danny Bowman

This week I’ve written a suspenseful flash. Alice’s father, Kevin, seems to be in trouble. What’s the problem? Where is he? Can Alice and her mother help him? Will they arrive on time?

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The Deserted Path

Our car bumped along the deserted path. ‘Are you sure this is the right way?’

My mother nodded, her lips pursed and her eyes glued to the road.

Above us, dark, heavy clouds loomed as the sun’s last pink-tinged rays faded into the horizon.

‘Will we make it on time?’ I asked. She didn’t answer.

The flash drive he had asked me to bring was hidden in my pocket.

‘What’s daddy doing here?’

A drop slid down her cheek, splashing on the hand that was grabbing the steering wheel with all her might.

Her voice trembled. ‘I don’t know, Alice.’   

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All my ‘Alice’ flash fiction written for the Friday Fictioneers Challenge can be read as standalones, but if you’re interested in reading previous stories of Alice’s adventures, here  they are!

About LucciaGray

Writer, blogger, teacher, reader and lover of words wherever they are. Author of The Eyre Hall Trilogy, the breathtaking sequel to Jane Eyre. Luccia lives in sunny Spain, but her heart's in Victorian London.

Posted on September 8, 2017, in Friday Fictioneers and tagged , , . Bookmark the permalink. 19 Comments.

  1. Ooo, so many questions ! Good one, Luccia!

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  2. Tightly written with lots of qns unanswered, the main driver (sorry) for me is the curiosity – a general feeling of curiosity. – before encouraging and formulating my thoughts into actual worded questions.

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    • Thank you for commenting 🙂
      I wanted to practice with a little suspense. I’m trying to tighten my writing style in my novels, and it’s really making me rethink every single word.
      It’s amazing how I thought the focus was on the father and his motives and situation, and for you it was on the mother (Maura). The three have a lot of secrets from each other, and Maura knows much more than she’s letting on…

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  3. That’s Probably why I gravitated towards her… I am glad you were trying to tighten your writing style and the ultimate is flash fiction. Gonna have to lookout for your novels. 😎

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  4. Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it💖

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  5. Suspense and intrigue masterfully woven. Good write!

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  6. Full of mystery! Liked it.

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  7. All those questions you proposed——–and not one single answer! What will I DO?? 🙂

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  8. Read on next week😀 There may be some answers, depending on the photo prompt! Thank you for dropping by and commenting💖

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  9. Nice build up. I’m wondering what’s on that flash drive. You left us thirsty for more. Well done.

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  10. Effective at capturing a reader’s interest. Well done.

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  11. Dear Luccia,

    You leave me with so many questions. Definitely a pager turner. Good job.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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